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yori-chan Council Members
Number of posts : 387 Registration date : 2008-06-16
Character Name: Anola Age: unknown to many Race: Ecarian
| Subject: Re: My work Mon Aug 03, 2009 2:54 am | |
| It...Relates to me, i guess, or people ive know. Not only that but its all so true. To yourself and to others. Its totally deep down in the soul stuff. | |
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Jenu Members
Number of posts : 413 Age : 352 Registration date : 2009-07-26
Character Name: Rana Mizu Age: 60-something (looks 20) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Mon Aug 03, 2009 12:58 pm | |
| Well, for me I guess I like the emotion that pours out through your poems, also the fact that most of them (except for Shadows) are pretty short and to the point, the fact that you aren't hindered by rhyme and rythm, the flowing word choice but without great big words, and perhaps too the simplicity of each of your poems (again excluding Shadows). | |
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Raiga Olir Members
Number of posts : 475 Age : 33 Registration date : 2008-05-01
Character Name: Cala Rive Age: looks 30 (is immortal) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Tue Aug 04, 2009 1:21 pm | |
| I thank you all for your kind words. I'm glad you were all honest.
@Jenu, I wrote Shadows mostly as a challenge to myself. It turned out pretty good, for the reasons behind it, but I still think it could have been better.
Now here are my next two works...
MoonRise Waiting
Wishing for night to come For the leave of the sun. I want to view the moon I hope she rises soon…
Passing through twilight’s gleam Life is not but a dream. Upon the cold air rests All the hopes, worst and best…
I sleep nocturnal now Although I know not how. I pass into night’s home Over the ocean’s foam…
Yet, no moon do I see… I fall to wounded knees Heart’s grief for all to view Wish for love on sea, blue…
Leaving
Friend makes stupid choices, Deep within rise the voices. Music tames the beasts within Hope my rage passes again.
Divided mind, split desires Friend’s choices feed mental fires. Holes in walls show my anger Fear my friends are in danger…
I cannot remain darkened And I will not be harkened To return. Need seclusion, And not a peace illusion.
When control I have regained Fate will bring end to my pain. Only then will I return Farewell, from the Black Nocturne…
I mean all that's said in Leaving. I will be gone from this place until I regain control of my demons. She who is spoken of in the first verse can figure out why for herself... I will hold to my promises for my attendance to future events, but it's going to be a risk. I leave you with my fondest wish that you'll leave me in peace, but should you absolutely require me; Eve, Luna, Vamp, Cookie, and DragonBullet all have my number and probably wouldn't mind relaying messages to me during my absence... I'll give you a more detailed account for my absence upon my return, when my demons have calmed and I can think clearly once more... | |
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Jenu Members
Number of posts : 413 Age : 352 Registration date : 2009-07-26
Character Name: Rana Mizu Age: 60-something (looks 20) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Tue Aug 04, 2009 4:04 pm | |
| Awww....magician! *huggle* Bye. T_T | |
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yori-chan Council Members
Number of posts : 387 Registration date : 2008-06-16
Character Name: Anola Age: unknown to many Race: Ecarian
| Subject: Re: My work Tue Aug 04, 2009 6:32 pm | |
| Im sure everyone will agree when i say, we shall meet again, and when we do it will be a joyous reunion. | |
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Jenu Members
Number of posts : 413 Age : 352 Registration date : 2009-07-26
Character Name: Rana Mizu Age: 60-something (looks 20) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Wed Aug 05, 2009 1:52 pm | |
| Indeed. I pray that your sorrow and anger will not hold you forever magician. | |
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Raiga Olir Members
Number of posts : 475 Age : 33 Registration date : 2008-05-01
Character Name: Cala Rive Age: looks 30 (is immortal) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Thu Aug 06, 2009 10:23 am | |
| Returning is often harder than leaving is... I know that now.
@Jenu; anger and sorrow are pieces of myself that won't die anytime soon. You'll learn after reading the following. Actually, everyone will.
I am not one person... this you must understand to understand me in my entirety. My mind is divided between two personalities. One you all know and love (me), the other I keep sealed away in defense of myself, my friends, and my family (my "demon"). We each have different talents, mine is the written word (NOT the spoken!), his is skills with various weapons and fighting styles. Between the two of us, we can take a life just as easily as save one... Whereas I am friendly and peaceful, he is a being born of hatred, sorrow, and rage. My cousin and sister have met him firsthand, my parents have seen him, but none know him, and for that, I'm glad...
Whenever I myself get mad (or emotionally hurt), it makes it that much easier for him to appear (my sister, it seems, has learned this... she doesn't annoy me with the frequency she once displayed).
I fear this being, yet I cannot relieve myself of this curse. So, if ever I dissappear (after an experience I'd rather not relive, more often than not), this is what I'm taking care of. I do not mean to seem rude by these absences, I mean to protect my friends...
He's back in his mental chains now, so I have returned, but I'm still pretty unstable...
Now you all probably know why Rive is so solitary... I wrote myself into him more than any other of my characters... Only his "demon" can take physical form, unlike mine. | |
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The Dark Lord Happy Pantz Grand Editor
Number of posts : 1511 Age : 33 Registration date : 2008-05-05
Character Name: Turin and Allie Ryuu Age: ??? and 18 Race: Dragon
| Subject: Re: My work Thu Aug 06, 2009 3:29 pm | |
| but if you think about it, Rive isn't alone, and neither are you.
we will always be here if you need us | |
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yori-chan Council Members
Number of posts : 387 Registration date : 2008-06-16
Character Name: Anola Age: unknown to many Race: Ecarian
| Subject: Re: My work Thu Aug 06, 2009 7:50 pm | |
| Of course. You must remember that. | |
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Jenu Members
Number of posts : 413 Age : 352 Registration date : 2009-07-26
Character Name: Rana Mizu Age: 60-something (looks 20) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Thu Aug 06, 2009 8:16 pm | |
| I know I don't know you very well, but I'm here for you too.
And, btw, I know exactly what you mean. Did you know that my name JENU is an acronym (?) for Jakara, Ellidora, Nera, and Ulindria.
...Jakara is my demon. And just like you she comes out when I'm angry or upset or sad, and there is no controlling her once she's fully let loose. It takes all the control of the other three to hold her down sometimes, but she does come out she can do some truly horrible things (she HAS done some truly horrible things). And sometimes I wish more than anything that I could just be rid of her once and for all, but the truth is that oftentimes she protects me from getting hurt even more by those I love. v.v Iz very sad, but I say all that to let you know that I know what you're going through. *huggles magician* | |
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yori-chan Council Members
Number of posts : 387 Registration date : 2008-06-16
Character Name: Anola Age: unknown to many Race: Ecarian
| Subject: Re: My work Thu Aug 06, 2009 11:51 pm | |
| I think we all know, in our own way. | |
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Raiga Olir Members
Number of posts : 475 Age : 33 Registration date : 2008-05-01
Character Name: Cala Rive Age: looks 30 (is immortal) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Fri Aug 07, 2009 12:22 pm | |
| Again, I thank you all for your kind words. @DLHP: That's why Rive is with the other Heroes, why he forged a friendship with someone who wanted to kill him (Alexander Corvidae Oden). I bent that character to match me way too much. @Jenu: I only have Jarrel Samael Fulgen (my Demon). I use the name in a few of my RPs and stories, but that's where it originated.
As to future works, I'm still working. My muse has been absent recently, so I may be out of poetry for a couple months. Just want to give you all fair warning. | |
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Jenu Members
Number of posts : 413 Age : 352 Registration date : 2009-07-26
Character Name: Rana Mizu Age: 60-something (looks 20) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Fri Aug 07, 2009 3:27 pm | |
| I hope you're feeling better now though... | |
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Raiga Olir Members
Number of posts : 475 Age : 33 Registration date : 2008-05-01
Character Name: Cala Rive Age: looks 30 (is immortal) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Fri Aug 07, 2009 6:36 pm | |
| Aside from the lack of muse and the new hole in my room's wall, I'm fine. | |
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Jenu Members
Number of posts : 413 Age : 352 Registration date : 2009-07-26
Character Name: Rana Mizu Age: 60-something (looks 20) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Fri Aug 07, 2009 8:12 pm | |
| XDD. Try finding a cool painting, that's often their best use--covering holes in the wall.
Anyway, I'z very glad you're feeling better! ^_^ | |
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luna Newb Members
Number of posts : 176 Age : 31 Registration date : 2008-09-04
Character Name: Angel Age: 17 Race: Human
| Subject: Re: My work Tue Aug 11, 2009 7:41 pm | |
| go to the open house meet me in the gym.plz | |
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Raiga Olir Members
Number of posts : 475 Age : 33 Registration date : 2008-05-01
Character Name: Cala Rive Age: looks 30 (is immortal) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Sat Aug 15, 2009 5:53 pm | |
| @luna: consider it done. @Jenu: The holes are like my scars, reminders of what not to do, I don't hide my scars, so I don't hide the holes.
Here are my next three...
My Stand
Wonders have come at last While my eyes view the past Mists divide, Fate has seen All that has ever been.
I have grown, I have changed My life becomes deranged My soul bends, yet won’t break. My heart will always ache.
I bleed with self and soul From a heart turned to coal My wish Fate has denied But Fate can be defied…
Reunion
Sitting in shaded park Family near, hear them lark. Sharing tales of joyful past Good times rarely last.
My cousin is nearby Catching Frisbee in flight. I sit and type and eat As grass moves ‘round my feet.
I cherish this short time While I’m in my prime Sadly, I come to believe We will soon have to leave.
Reunion on Time’s back Has come and faded black But I shed not a tear, I know there is next year.
When I Cry
When I cry… Tears don’t fly. Words fall down From eyes brown… Stand on stage Write on page The word-tears That speak years. Release pain, Show my shame Hide my face Leave this place. Say farewell… All ends well… | |
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yori-chan Council Members
Number of posts : 387 Registration date : 2008-06-16
Character Name: Anola Age: unknown to many Race: Ecarian
| Subject: Re: My work Sat Aug 15, 2009 6:01 pm | |
| you really have out done yourself. Good work. | |
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Raiga Olir Members
Number of posts : 475 Age : 33 Registration date : 2008-05-01
Character Name: Cala Rive Age: looks 30 (is immortal) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Sat Aug 15, 2009 6:08 pm | |
| Thank you. This is my natural "God(s)-Given" talent, and I plan to use it to full effect before I pass on. I've already wasted countless years, now I've got to catch up! I'm still working on more, slowly. So keep waiting (im)patiently and you will be rewarded in time. Now, I do have a DeviantArt I started a while back, I'll be posting things about my inspiration and my style there that I don't post here. http://magician-infinity.deviantart.comCheck it out. | |
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luna Newb Members
Number of posts : 176 Age : 31 Registration date : 2008-09-04
Character Name: Angel Age: 17 Race: Human
| Subject: Re: My work Sun Aug 16, 2009 6:21 pm | |
| pari passu, mea culpa, poeta nascitur, i say resurgam, amor vincit omnia | |
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yori-chan Council Members
Number of posts : 387 Registration date : 2008-06-16
Character Name: Anola Age: unknown to many Race: Ecarian
| Subject: Re: My work Mon Aug 17, 2009 3:22 pm | |
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Jenu Members
Number of posts : 413 Age : 352 Registration date : 2009-07-26
Character Name: Rana Mizu Age: 60-something (looks 20) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Mon Aug 17, 2009 9:22 pm | |
| looks like latin...
prepare passu (?), my culpa (?), poet nascitur (?), I say resurgam (?), always say I love you.
^_^" I really need to brush up on my latin, lol. | |
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yori-chan Council Members
Number of posts : 387 Registration date : 2008-06-16
Character Name: Anola Age: unknown to many Race: Ecarian
| Subject: Re: My work Mon Aug 17, 2009 10:22 pm | |
| well, you got some of it. | |
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Jenu Members
Number of posts : 413 Age : 352 Registration date : 2009-07-26
Character Name: Rana Mizu Age: 60-something (looks 20) Race: Elf
| Subject: Re: My work Tue Aug 18, 2009 1:54 pm | |
| OH wait! Culpa (I think) means desire or want. So... my desire. I still don't remember the other words though. =_= | |
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The Dark Lord Happy Pantz Grand Editor
Number of posts : 1511 Age : 33 Registration date : 2008-05-05
Character Name: Turin and Allie Ryuu Age: ??? and 18 Race: Dragon
| Subject: Re: My work Tue Aug 18, 2009 2:57 pm | |
| - Jenu wrote:
- OH wait! Culpa (I think) means desire or want. So... my desire. I still don't remember the other words though. =_=
In spanish, Mea Culpa means my fault.... | |
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